Writing Retreat 2024 (1)

I'm sitting in the dark under a plastic palm tree, lit by Christmas lights, holding up a 1988 Canada Winter Olympics glass with about an ounce or so of Scotch whisky in it—cheers!

What did I bring to this year’s writ­ing retreat?

  • 12 Man­i­to­ba beers
  • 2 lap­tops
  • 2 cam­eras
  • 2 tripods
  • more food than I need
  • not the cof­fee grinder, whoops
  • my bike
  • an assort­ment of books
  • a hope that the fore­cast is incor­rect and at least one night will be cloud-free

And now I’m about to start cook­ing sup­per, fin­ish­ing off the quite bit­ter[1]At least it’s got cool can art, by GMB Chomichuk. A Nec­es­sary Evil (which is def­i­nite­ly an IPA), and plan­ning out tonight’s writ­ing. (Ghosts? You bet. Star­ships? Absolutely.)

Series: Writing Retreat 2024

The entire series: Writ­ing Retreat 2024 (1); Writ­ing Retreat 2024 (2); Writ­ing Retreat 2024 (3); Writ­ing Retreat 2024 (4); Writ­ing Retreat (5a — Milky Way); Writ­ing Retreat (5b — Auro­ra Bore­alis); Writ­ing Retreat 2024: 6; Writ­ing Retreat 2024: 7; Writ­ing Retreat 2024: The End.

Foot­notes

Foot­notes
↑1 At least it’s got cool can art, by GMB Chomichuk.

The “The Two Seasons” incident

Janky text that spells out "You wouldn't properly license copyrighted material for a provincial English exam"

This morn­ing, on the radio, the very first news sto­ry I heard was about how the provin­cial Eng­lish exam got post­poned[1]Or can­celed, who knows. because they had, to use Man­i­to­ba Edu­ca­tion’s words, “an issue regard­ing nec­es­sary per­mis­sions to use mate­ri­als.” And I laughed.

Con­tin­ue read­ing “The “The Two Sea­sons” inci­dent” →

Foot­notes

Foot­notes
↑1 Or can­celed, who knows.

Goals, Nov. 2023

Aurora borealis above evergreens

Hoo boy, I haven’t done one of these in a while.

  • Attack NaNoW­riMo, though I don’t think I’m going to go for 50,000 words
  • If the weath­er and space weath­er per­mits, get out for some auro­ra photos
  • Set a good exam­ple for my mentee

Yep, I’m a men­tor again. Good luck to us both.

Writing Retreat 2023: Friday

Star trails and a thunderstorm

Well. I did­n’t real­ly keep up with post­ing about my retreat, did I now.

I was at the cab­in for a week, Fri­day to Fri­day, with a cou­ple days off in Win­nipeg for my mom’s birth­day. The weath­er was gen­er­al­ly pret­ty grey, though it warmed up on Thurs­day enough for me to take my one and only kayak ride. (It was love­ly, but windy, so the lake was a bit choppy.)

Thurs­day night, final­ly, the sky was most­ly clear. There was a thun­der­storm far, far off to the north; I could see the flash­es, but I could­n’t hear the thun­der at all.

The Big DipperThe Big Dipper (with lines)

I also snapped pho­tos of Jupiter and all four Galilean moons, and Sat­urn (I think I even caught a bit of the ring).

Series: Writing Retreat 2023

The entire series: Writ­ing Retreat 2023, day one; Writ­ing Retreat 2023: Thurs­day bike ride; Writ­ing Retreat 2023: Fri­day.

Writing Retreat 2023, day one

Semicircular star trails in a sky made a bit grey by smoke haze; a tree is in the foreground on the left

I moved in to the cab­in Fri­day evening—laptop, sleep­ing bag, cam­eras, bike, and food—and got set­tled in. I read for a bit[1]Cur­rent read: Shades of Grey by Jasper Fforde, which is pret­ty trip­py so far. and checked the fore­cast. The evenings this week look pret­ty cloudy, so I’m not sure how much astropho­tog­ra­phy I’ll get to do. Last night was clear, though, so I decid­ed to head on out about 10pm.

I got set up at the Wasagam­ing dock just before 11 and snapped about 30 min­utes’ of star trails. I dis­cov­ered lat­er that the cam­era was­n’t quite as lev­el as I’d hoped, so I end­ed up crop­ping out the thin line of the lake, but the tree on the left made a nice fore­ground. (See the pho­to above.)

After that I head­ed to Spruces, and set up one cam­era for anoth­er round of star trails…

Semicircular arcs of star trails above a dark lake

…while the oth­er one was des­ig­nat­ed for Milky Way photos.

It was a good start to the week, I think.

Goals

What I’d like to do with my week:

  • write (aim­ing for 10,000 words, let’s say, in two projects: Praise the Torch When ‘Tis Burned[2]aka “Derelict star­ship + ghosts” and The Slow Apoc­a­lypse[3]aka “Wiz­ard v. War­head”.
  • pho­tog­ra­phy
  • read a bunch
  • bike rides (aim­ing for 5–10km a day, weath­er permitting)
  • kayak­ing (at least twice, again, weath­er permitting)
  • cel­e­brate my mom’s birthday

Hold my calls, I’ll be at the cabin.

Series: Writing Retreat 2023

The entire series: Writ­ing Retreat 2023, day one; Writ­ing Retreat 2023: Thurs­day bike ride; Writ­ing Retreat 2023: Fri­day.

Foot­notes

Foot­notes
↑1 Cur­rent read: Shades of Grey by Jasper Fforde, which is pret­ty trip­py so far.
↑2 aka “Derelict star­ship + ghosts”
↑3 aka “Wiz­ard v. Warhead”

Writing Goals: November 2022

fountain pen on notepad

I’m doing NaNoW­riMo this year, sort of. Instead of push­ing hard for 50,000 words in a brand-new project, I’m going to use the month to try and fin­ish the first draft of Dried Flow­ers. My aim is at least 300 words each and every day. So far today I’m at 307 words, and I think I’m going to do a bit more after I fin­ish this post.

I’ll try to make sure to post update here every so often (let’s say week­ly, so I’m not bor­ing you).

Wish me luck!

Writing Retreat 2022: Wrap-up

How’d I do against my goals?

  • write at least 10,000 words in “Dried Flow­ers”: Check. The nov­el went from 33,000 words to 45,000.
  • get some astropho­tog­ra­phy done. Check: see below.
  • read some books. I read the last chap­ter in Fugi­tive Teleme­try, the last 6 chap­ters in The Book of the New Sun, and made my way a bit over half-way through Catch-22. Also, I bor­rowed the next Sand­man col­lec­tion from one of the library’s online resources, and read a cou­ple chap­ters in it. 
  • ride my bike. A lit­tle; one 6km ride and a few quick runs across the dam into town to go to the cof­fee shop, so as to use their wifi.
  • go kayak­ing. I got out on the water on Thurs­day and Fri­day, for a total of about 8½km.
  • relax. Yes? I had a hard time sleep­ing past 7 am, but oth­er­wise it was a relax­ing week.

All in all, this was a good retreat. As always, I wish it had been longer, but you know what they say: so it goes.

Series: Writing Retreat 2022

The entire series: Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Goals; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Mon­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Tues­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wednes­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Thurs­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Fri­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wrap-up.

Writing Retreat 2022: Friday

In the morn­ing I wrote my 1,000 words after break­fast, then read a few more chap­ters in Catch-22. Man, that book is con­vo­lut­ed; I think it’s a good re-read, espe­cial­ly con­sid­er­ing that my cur­rent project is some­what non-lin­ear too.[1]It crossed my mind, as I was in the kayak, that Peace and Jacob’s Lad­der will also have inter­est­ing things to say to me, as I write this tale. But I think I’ll wait till the first draft is done.

After lunch I went to the cof­fee shop to post yes­ter­day’s mis­sive, then—since the weath­er was, if any­thing, more love­ly than yesterday—I took the kayak out onto the lake again. As I was return­ing, I checked my dis­tance, and found I’d gone 4.31 km. I decid­ed that anoth­er quick pass by the pub­lic beach/floating play struc­ture and back should eas­i­ly add anoth­er 0.69 km, and I was right—my final dis­tance as I beached my craft was just over 5 km. I can live with that.

I read a bit more, had supper—the last of the burg­ers I bar­be­cued, which leaves only 6.02×10²³ smok­ies, cool cool cool. And now I’m about to start writ­ing, with a glass of iced cof­fee[2]Made from the dregs of my morn­ing cof­fee, poured into a glass and stored in the fridge, where it devel­oped a thin skin of ice. beside me.

The sky was cloud­less after dark, so I packed my gear and head­ed north for a few kilo­me­ters. I found a nice dark spot on a side road just before the entry to the riv­er val­ley, and shot some pho­tos of the Milky Way again.

Sample

She walked toward the lake. Her san­dals filled with sand, fine and soft as talc, annoy­ing her. She took the san­dals off and car­ried them, loop­ing their straps over her mid­dle and index fin­gers and crook­ing her hand into a loose fist at her side. The san­dals’ heels thumped her thigh soft­ly with every step, which was a dif­fer­ent kind of annoying.

At the edge of the water the sand dark­ened, not because it was wet, she saw, but because words had snagged in it, lay flat on it: water-coloured sans-serif let­ters over­lap­ping in sense­less pro­fu­sion. A mil­lion thes and as and saids in blue and aqua­ma­rine and smoke grey were scat­tered as far as she could see, and tens of thou­sands of words less common—less invis­i­ble as one of her edi­tors had put it—were lay­ered below and above, fresh­ly deposit­ed or soak­ing into the sand, dark­en­ing, dis­ap­pear­ing: birth, house, joy, spar­row, rose, for­mi­da­ble. Soft wavelets made of bluish words capped with small white word­caps dropped new words as she watched, the white foam of win­dow whirl bribe fad­ing, dark­en­ing, becom­ing part of the great smear of words.

She set her san­dals down where the sand was still heart­break­ing­ly bright, where the waves had­n’t come in and crest­ed and crashed only to recede. Where the paper was still unblem­ished, the page still holy and blank. She walked into the water; no, the lake of words.

Water isn’t wet, she remem­bered some­one telling her, after some­one else had made the “water wet, fire hot, sky blue” joke at some TV report about a new dis­cov­ery that was painful­ly obvi­ous if you just applied com­mon sense. Water makes oth­er things wet, but wet­ness, he told her, jab­bing a fin­ger to make his point stick (and it must have worked, because here she was think­ing about it) is not an intrin­sic prop­er­ty of the water itself.

The words touched her and did not feel wet, did not wet her ankles or (as she pro­gressed) her calves. They clung to her as water would, mold­ing them­selves against her shapes. She felt tran­som and for­get and peace against the backs of her knees, in amid the whirling yeses and saids and thes. She walked fur­ther, deep­er. Her skirt did­n’t cling against her as it would in water, but the words crowd­ed onto its dark fab­ric too. The tail of her blouse was dec­o­rat­ed with now and togeth­er, dried and he.

She took a breath and ducked under the surface.

Series: Writing Retreat 2022

The entire series: Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Goals; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Mon­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Tues­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wednes­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Thurs­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Fri­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wrap-up.

Foot­notes

Foot­notes
↑1 It crossed my mind, as I was in the kayak, that Peace and Jacob’s Lad­der will also have inter­est­ing things to say to me, as I write this tale. But I think I’ll wait till the first draft is done.
↑2 Made from the dregs of my morn­ing cof­fee, poured into a glass and stored in the fridge, where it devel­oped a thin skin of ice.

Writing Retreat 2022: Thursday

Star Trails from the deck of the cabin

I got up ear­li­er than I would have liked. The cab­in got chilly overnight—the out­side tem­per­a­ture dropped to some­where around 8°C last night—and so I opened up the cur­tains any­where the sun would shine in. Then I made cof­fee and had a banana, and sat down to process last night’s pho­tos and charge up the cam­era batteries.

I wrote about 1,000 words in the morn­ing and then read some more of my nice light beach read, Catch-22. (I’ve always men­tal­ly paired Catch-22 with Slaugh­ter­house-Five, since both are anti-war satires and both have titles of the form word dash num­ber. There’s anoth­er way they’re linked, I’ve decid­ed, because both of them unstick the read­er in time. In Slaugh­ter­house-Five it’s explic­it; one of the first lines is “Bil­ly Pil­grim has come unstuck in time”. In Catch-22, it’s implic­it; Yos­sar­i­an’s sto­ry bounces around in the time­line, with flash­backs, rem­i­nis­cences, and fore­shad­ow­ing leav­ing the read­er unsure just when in the sto­ry we might be. Are they fly­ing 30 mis­sions or 55? Has Snow­den per­ished yet or is he still alive?)

I biked down across the dam to the cof­fee shop to post yes­ter­day’s update (which I’m sure you’ve read) and mut­ter to myself about the 503 Service Unavailable error my site is still inter­mit­tent­ly throw­ing. (I’ve got an open tech sup­port tick­et reach­ing back to, I dun­no, July or so; appar­ent­ly it’s a hard prob­lem to solve[1]As the old joke goes, there are only two hard prob­lems in com­put­er sci­ence: nam­ing vari­ables, cache inval­i­da­tion, and off-by-one errors..)

Back at the cab­in, I had a brief chat with my friend Ed, who was trim­ming the grass at his daugh­ter’s cab­in across the street. He invit­ed me up the hill for a vis­it later.

I took the kayak out—finally, a day warm enough to go out on the water!—and pad­dled about 3½ km, up the lake and back again. If this isn’t nice, what is?

I had some supper—it’s becom­ing appar­ent I BBQed enough smok­ies on Mon­day for lunch that I’ll be eat­ing smok­ies till the day after doomsday—and then sat down to write my evening’s 1,000 words, which end­ed up being a weird lit­tle acros­tic snip­pet that’ll need a lot of edit­ing. But as Sir Ter­ry Pratch­ett said, The first draft is just you telling your­self the sto­ry. It’s not gonna make sense, yet, to most any­one else. That les­son is both nec­es­sary and a hard one to learn; I think I re-learn it every time I sit down to write.

After writ­ing I went up to Karen and Ed’s cab­in, high atop the hill, and we sat on their deck and chat­ted for about two hours. They say hi, everyone.

The skies were clear when I got back to my bor­rowed cab­in, and I was sore tempt­ed to load up my cam­era gear and go snap some more pho­tos in the dark. But I was also still tired from the night before, so I com­pro­mised: I set up the cam­era on the deck and col­lect­ed an hour’s worth of star trails right here. Even in a light-pol­lut­ed spot like this—there’s a bright white lamp that shines down on the deck that’s eas­i­ly as bright as the full moon—you can see the stars. You can tell—the pho­to’s up above.

Sample

She made her cir­cuit again, in reverse this time: the small-win­dowed orig­i­nal build­ing, with its muse­um pieces, the green chair from The Rt. Hon. Alan T. Kim­pole, with­out whom per­haps there would be no library here, the dusty arti­facts with their small, neat­ly-typed plac­ards; then the First Annex, stodgy with dark wood (again, here, she found it dif­fi­cult to not imag­ine the place smelling of brandy and the com­bined smoke of gen­er­a­tions’ worth of cig­ars); the West Wing with its offices; the North Stacks with its prime min­is­ters flank­ing the very dat­ed por­trait of the Queen; and final­ly the O’Neir room, sur­pris­ing her not at all with its insis­tence on being last.

The last shall be first. Who said that? She should know. It used to be one of Nathan’s favourite quotes.

She hes­i­tat­ed before open­ing the door, her hand trem­bling a lit­tle. Please God, she thought, don’t let it be the funer­al home. Because she’d come to sus­pect why there was a pho­to of their wed­ding next to the rose­wood urn, and she did­n’t like the implications.

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There was a lake in the room now.

Series: Writing Retreat 2022

The entire series: Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Goals; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Mon­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Tues­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wednes­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Thurs­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Fri­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wrap-up.

Foot­notes

Foot­notes
↑1 As the old joke goes, there are only two hard prob­lems in com­put­er sci­ence: nam­ing vari­ables, cache inval­i­da­tion, and off-by-one errors.

Writing Retreat 2022: Wednesday

Cabin chic: a golden sun figure hanging on the outside wall
Cabin chic: a golden sun figure hanging on the outside wall
Cab­in chic

Today, after break­fast, I sat down and wrote about 1,500 words (I real­ly want­ed to get the man­u­script up over 39,000, and I just man­aged it). Then I read for a bit, and around lunch hopped into the car to go check out Big Valley.

Con­tin­ue read­ing “Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wednes­day” →

Series: Writing Retreat 2022

The entire series: Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Goals; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Mon­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Tues­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wednes­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Thurs­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Fri­day; Writ­ing Retreat 2022: Wrap-up.